duhnduhndun!! so good. alright i'll stop gushing. my comments remain the same from last chapter--i wich i could have known Davidian. ^^

wow, your writing is so powerful. i think currently i like Olin better than Halliwell...but ireally like how olin sees Halliwell. i want to know a lot more. and is the way you spelt Devine pruproseful or did you mean divine? i con't find anhitng worng wiht this chapter except for ti's shortness. is ther emroe detial You could add?? more setting--it'd be better maybe oyt explain this stuff know, before you get into more action, you know?

Oh, what a releif to find a story worth spending time on. i like Halliwell already and found no drastic errors in terms of writing (i am an editor at heart ^^) your dialogue makes me envious. only real problem is the repitition of a few words at the beggining--"untimely" is the one i remember. i would suggest reading your story aloud to yourself, at least when you rewrite, and that way you'll catch the small mistakes. Oh, and how old is Halliwell?

Would you do me a big favor and read a few chapters of my story, Shadowing? i'll be back toread more^^! Ama

::looks smug:: I knew it! I told Krisian he was a council memeber! You gave me the hint. You said we knew him, but not really. So obviuosly he had to be a councilor. I give you a bag of un-stud muffins. You can throw one at the Corppie and make him an un-stud.
Ta-ta!
Lily

I KNEW IT! I knew it, I knew it! Ha! THAT'S who Owler is! In no relation owls... agg, you're frustrating. But now I know! So ha! Eep! Poor Halliwell! Everyone is just out to get him, huh? Poor guy. K, update soon... er. Bye!
-Krisian-

How frightening! These people truly are dreadful, aren't they? I do hope, that with Olin's help, Halliwell will be alright. Oh, thank you for the explanation; the story makes much more sense now. :) This is also well-written, I might add, like the other chapters and I anxiously anticipate an update. Keep Writin'! ~*Mettie*~

Oo, the thick plotens. Do we get to go perspective of the prince now? That would be fun... I think.
*waves at the angry person behind you* Hi Aunt Tabby!
I deem you need to write more...now...at this very moment...really, now...
~Lilrin

This is VERY well-written and I'm very impressed by your use of the language. I am usually bored by this sort of thing, but congratulations, you have officially interested me in foreign affairs! (Fictional as they may be.) I truly do enjoy reading this, but I do have one sincerely embarassing question: what is a Devine?

Excellent prologue. You really leave the reader desiring more. Good job!

Wow! This is awesome! I like this except for ONE thing-YOU NEED TO UPDATE! I AM GOING CRAZY! lol!I'm jk, but I do wanna know what happens! Please update soon! hehe! It is a very intriguing beginning and I can't wait to see what happens! If you have any time please read and review my work The Violin! I'd appreciate it a lot! Well keep writing! You sure do have talent for it!

Gah! A cliffhanger so early?!?! Why? Err, err to you! I hate you now! (ok, so not really, just your talent. :D) When are you writing more? I want to know! Beat the Corppie, he needs to update too.
Remember...more!
Lilrin

Whoa! I am SO impressed. That was good. I like. Couple spelling errors, but other than that WOW! Your wording sonds like the "Guardians of Time" novels by Marian Curley - have you read them? [I LOVE Arkarian... drool...] SO, who is Halliwell anyway? What does the title of The Devine entail exactly? And what to the Council peoples want? How did Davidian die? Why is the sky blue? How many fingers am I holding up? Why am I asking all these questions? Ok... stop reading this review and start updating! NOW! GO!
-Krisian-

Woa! Why for have you kept this talent in the dark? My friend, you are full of surprises. I'm at a loss for words. The only thing I can do is read the first chapter...
Lady Lilrin