that's a pretty awesome ending! x]
the story was kinda weird at times and seemed sort of incomplete but i like the overall concept!
GOOD JOB!

I'm confused. When did Marie and Hayden have sex?
and seven months isnt nearly enough time for the baby to be healthy, it would need an incubator, most likely it would be stillborn.

wow.. nice story!! i just started reading it today.. and all i can say is that it is GREAT!! but 1 thing.. doesnt it take 9 months for a baby to fully develop?? o well i guess it doesnt need to be perfect.. hmm i wonder what will happen next when Lord Creston finds out that Marie has a baby.. Hayden's baby to be exact.. and i dont fully get the story of Marie's past.. it's kind of confusing..

who 7 months gone already? Now that is something, anyways aww she had a baby boy ^_^ Can't wait to read the ending =P

bleck. You started out well. pity. your characters have absolutely no motivation for what they do. so marie's bored--doesn't mean she would cut herself. heyden's horney--doesn't mean he'd want to help her. his grandfather's a relative, doesn't mean he'd want to help him help her. might want to work on that.

I like it. It's different and that's a good thing. It's both sweet and bittersweet at the same time. Good story.

I like it. It's different and that's a good thing. It's both sweet and bittersweet at the same time. Good story.

I like it. It's different and that's a good thing. It's both sweet and bittersweet at the same time. Good story.

I am still intrigued, and I am continuing to read! Great two chapters, I'm sorry it took me so long to get to read it. Back to school has been a pain, a hassle, and very time consuming! Anyway, I'm glad I got to read your story, it was very good. Your character developement is great, it seems natural and real.
Keep up the great work!
~Beau Coeur

awesome! cant wait for the next update!

Classes are such a pain in the you know what. Love the story. My only complaint was that it was moving too fast, until Hayden declared his love at first sight statement. Have fun writing that quest, it sounds like it will be awesome!

Muahaha another update O.o I wonder what will happen during this challenge... Honestly they seem to fall inlove rather quickly =P Hehehe love at first site ^_^ Anyways I hope Creston dies somehow ahaha, awesome chapter =P The kissing scene seemed really romantic hehehe, if only all moments could be like that >.> Heh don't worry I started school too =P But my parents don't care about the computer as long as I do my work xD Okay, anyways update again soon ^_^

O.o whoa short chapter but lots of events... O.o But suggestion is to be more descriptive of it =P I mean dont just say he said this... make it so that theres some emotion to it ^^;; Other than that I wonder what will happen! Please update again son!

Well, I see you've written quite a bit since the last time I read! Jeesh, that took me awhile to read. Great job though, I really like this story. I know I've said it before, but it stands true still-this is really original and I think that's part of what makes this story so great.
Please continue.
~Beau Coeur

Tanya is a very skilled writer with an excellent use of vocabulary.She has a good imagination and her story/style kept me intersted throughout the whole 6 pages! She should write more and if she makes another story I want to be the first to know!