Reviews for Ring Warriors: Markel

ColorCrayons
2004-08-25
ch 1,

abusereviewing as i go -
whoa, Tika...i have a character named Tika. not important just a side note
dialogue at the second flip seems very natural i know i've heard kids talking that way before - maybe perhaps add a bit more detail in there? so we can get a visual as well.
whoa, that came outta nowhere. sucks to be them...geez.
mm inturupted the kiss. sucks.
nice way to end it, what with the old man talking. u gonna give him a name? i'd like to know the history of all these people - how long they've been friends, details on how they met the old guy...etc
~Color outside the lines~

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