wow great job it had a nice flow even without a rhyme scheme

i love this poem... like you said it portaits many emotions and is still pleasant to read even though it has no rhyming scheme. Write on.

Wow... beautiful in all its woundful emotion.

Kick tail buddy you did great u aint gotta have rhythm u got skill

I like how the torn one is afraid to be free...It is life,isn't it?

Wow there's so much behind this. So much pain and anger. I really like this. You remind me of an old me except ur way better at writing and all that stuff. And u've probably been through more then i have