If you still work on this, this is what I have to say:

1. The US is never going to split into different factions. It is, and probably still will be far too patriotic, look at 911, that brought the country completely together. But we will never fight America against American.

2. Say that if we actually did fight against each other, there would be no monarchy sucha as a Queen. America would never accept a monarchy. As they have tasted democracy

After your review i felt the need to read what you have written. This is a brilliant story and I cannot wait to see it's continuation. It's one of the few post-WWI stories that works. Oh yes, i'd like to discuss something with you on hotmail chat if you don't mind. My email is mystic_eden_angel@aol.com