Please sort out the layout for this story, it was hard to read, but having persivered to the end I can gladly say this is an awesome story and very well described characters. Sort the layout out (as in double space AT THE END of paragraphs) and it will be awesome(r)

'wulf

Hey PJ, it's Phoniex:Arisen from the Ashes, from Dark Avenue. Any way, you wanted me to check out some of your stories, so I'm just writing a reveiw to show you I've read this one. Oh, and I really liked it. Well thought out. Bravo, bravo. Catch ya round,Lu

Dear Chipamunkie King,
Appart from stating that you have a very strong tendecy to associate your characters with the letter J you have written a very good story.
Even though you have previously described yourself with a more negative approach to story writing i would like to say that i disagree. As i would not describe them (the stories i have read to far) as negative, i would call them more descriptive as they have a brilliant use of visual immagry.
You should be very proud of yourself as you are a good writer...keep up the good work...sir of all chipamunkies!

Good story! Written like a pro! You might want to edit the layout, but it's nothing pressing!
>wolfy

You do have a Rod Serling vibe with the way you write. One person I say you need to email with some of these are Nicholas S. Stember. He's another writer of Science Fiction who dabbles in Horror, I am a horror writer who dabbles in Sci-Fi. You got some strong influences just need a little bit of help with the formatting on these. Talented work though; The Yeti is a talented piece by far but this story is one that I will be linking up from my blogs. You need the exposure.