I really like this, especially because it's obvious you did some research on Mount Everest, before writing this. I'm not sure if all the extra information here is true, but it's very interesting to read. I like how you managed to give each character a personality of a sort, which doesn't seem to happen a lot in storys of this kind. The idea itself is quite frightning, and I have to admit that people who climb on Everest shouldn't really expect to come back alive, so no great loss, eh? Just kidding, I'm not *that* cruel.

I do have a little constructive criticism, though. Sometimes you ended a sentence, when it would have flowd better if you used a comma, for example in this sentence: "That is a very long way when you have to walk upwards. And the fact that the whole mountain was..."

Instead of having a period and a capitalized 'and', you should have just put in a comma, and a regular 'and'. That's the proper way to write it out. If you wanted to keep it as two sentences, you should have gotten rid of the end. I think you might want to work on comma vs. period issues, and some other grammar mistakes.

To tell you the truth, this story was great, but you could use an editor to play with contraptions and the like. It seemed like a perfect story that the extra marks and spacing where messed with.

You also want to start a new paragraph everytime there's a new speaker, and you want to have some space between each paragraph, because it's easier to follow (and remember, this is the internet, you don't have to save paper).

I am surprised at such a horrifying tale you have here. It had me grabbing my ** in terror since my ** is very sensitive and happens to love Yetis, and so do I. I erupted in pleasure at the mere description of the massive beast of mountains and was frothing in delight when the story went on, erstwhile enraptured in your devious tale. I read this in the masterpiece known as TABLOID PORPOISES and have to give you props on such a awe-inspiring tale. One who reads this will realize it has the way of making one extremely excited. Jarred the Explorer had me ** a waterfall of delicious liquid. Overall you had me fantasizing that the Yeti was right there in front me, pulling me into his lustful moments of desire.

Great work Philip. Great stuff. I haven't been able to upload any stories, yet, cos the server or something is playing up. I'll continue to devotedly and quite stalkerishly reveiw your work. Work on!

this is really cool, I am not very good with my own works sort of thing but this rocks!

Dear Chipamunkie King,
Appart from the fact that (like i have already explained) you have a gift for writing and that at the stage when you were describing the Yeti's i half expected you to call it Kai, as he is 2 metres tall and well you two tease one another so i half expected that...he he he!
Anyway back to my review, i thought that was BRILLIANT! no wonder that funny man/woman/person is putting it into his book of kool stories.
I especially liked how you described when Jarred fell down into the snow, it reminded me of some of those gripping moments in Vertical Limit (i loved that movie)...talk 2 u later
and keep it up, sir!

Wow! This story is excellent! I never thought of the Yeti as such of a nasty creature. Good work! I could feel a lot of power from this and it was nice to read something a little different than your everyday sci-fi story. Very nice work!! Keep it up!

The ending reminded me of the ending of The Thing. Sad and heroic at the same time. Nothing wrong with it!
>wolfy

Why wasn't I surprised that there would be a Yetti story on here, this is a cool write. I am doing an anthology of horror and Sci-fi stories; I was reading this and was wondering if you want in on the anthology. I do have a lot of horror coming in -- so I thought I would put a few Science Fiction stories in there. This is one story that really caught my attention for a Sci-Fi story. How long have you been writing period because with a story like this you got some experience behind you. I am going to add this story to my sci-fi list. Oh if you are looking for a Loch Ness Monster type story set in the Great Lakes -- I wrote one.