Ouch. Whoever she is, I hope that she's been able to untwist herself. Good job.

Mattew, this is sad. Graciously written... but sad. I'm amazed by your writings...really!

ah nice piece.

Very powerful. Sometimes it is difficult to make rhyme work in your favor but I think you have done well.
"Hatred billows in the breeze." I really liked that line; it brings some interesting images/ideas to mind.
Its definitely a dark poem and I think you've managed to get that across without turning it into "my black tear, like my broken soul" type thing. If that makes sense.
One suggestion, go back and read it without all the "and"s. Sometimes it can give a piece just a little added poetic flair.
Arrivederc,
-Terra-

Gripping and haunting. I'm sure you did her story justice. Very nicely done my friend. I hope whoever you wrote this for appriciates it.
Hawke