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| TechnicolorPants 2004-11-21 ch 1,  | abuseSAD! It brought so much emotion when you used the repitition of "out the door" really liked this, good job! ~fruitcakes |
| Single and Fabulous 2004-09-18 ch 1, | abuseWow! Talk about powerful and yet so sad at the same time! I have a similar poem called "Gay" and story about being forced out of ur family called "Life." I loved it, espically the continuel "Out the door" It keep the being thrown out in perspective. Very good writing, Stefen, I did enjoy it. Since you said, I'm writing a new slash fantasy story called "Power of the Nivea," maybe you'd like to read it. I want all the reviews I can get. XOXO, Phoebe |
| Goldensong 2004-08-18 ch 1, | abuseI repeat what I said in "Why does he cry"-you like that repetion don't you! This one was just nicely angsty. |
| ColdFrost 2004-08-17 ch 1, | abuseVery good poem. the repetition is very effective. |
| Artificial Refuge 2004-08-16 ch 1, | abuseI like this one! It's really sad, 'specially with the repetition. I love 'Darkness impending' (randomly). Write more like this! |
| Mercedes Evon 2004-08-16 ch 1, | abuse... Aw... I swear, if I ever have kids... and one of them tells me they're gay/lesbian... I'll just give 'em a big hug and love them more, for being honest... T_T |
| KASoroka 2004-08-16 ch 1, | abuseTerrible but things like that happen. I love how you used that one line over again each time giving it more meaning. |