Wow, this poem was truly touching. I've had friends who wanted to commit suicide, and I've attempted it once. Anyways...just wanted to say that your words hit home. Very good work.

Gee, I know how that sort of thing feels. If Aubrey's told you anything about Kevin (who he is, et cetera) he's one of my friends over here--they met at my seventeenth birthday, as a matter of fact :P--and last year I think I pretty much stopped him from...hurting...himself. I told him that he could call me if he ever needed someone to talk to...and he did, luckily. It makes me feel bad he still cuts, but there really isn't much I can do except let him know I'm there.
You express your thoughts eloquently with nice words and good command of the language. You've certainly got lots of potential, if you keep writing. Your emotions also come through your words very clearly, from the three poems of yours I've read. There are man different images in this work that flitted through my mind as I read it, ethereal and lasting long enough to prove their point nicely. There isn't really anything in this one that I can think of which you might want to improve upon, except again the punctuation (but I'm anal about that stuff.) I look forward to reading more of your poems : )

Wow...I loved it. You have a great talent for writing, Shu-chan~! ^^ Or should I say...Bluesummers? ^.~ Back to the point, though...your poem is amazing. Hope you write plenty more of them, and post them so I can read them! :3 Byebye~!

wow. this is so powerful. It's beautifully written. keep up the good work.

perfectly stated... u capture the image well... I like the flow.. the words work well together,I know both sides of the story. both the longing to help her heal and the wish to give up... but u tell the story perfectly.. couldn't have said it better myself.

It's...powerful, breath-taking even. The words create an image of the poem, because of it's wonder. This is a great poem Wissa-chan...So don't tell me you're a horrible writer. Your poetry could bring tears to someone's eyes.
Oh and you might want to switch under your settings, for anonymous reviews. It says that you must be a member to leave a review. Just telling you if you wanted Jessi or Beth to review for this.

This poem is beautifully put being that the poem is quite sad and harsh. I look forward to reading other pieces of your writing in the future.

that is harsh and raw...i can understand how you feel, i've been through that phase. Your words pierced me, just because the descriptions are so real,and the imagery just breaks out a whole spectrum of emotions...
lovely, lovely, job...

powerful and passionate. I really like this, keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.