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| Morncreek 2004-12-05 ch 1,   | Very powerful and sweet. I love the rhyming and the choice of adjectives. It is like a breath of fresh air, yet at the same time a golden memory. One correction that I would suggest: change "seize" to "cease". Cease rhymes and also makes the phrase understandable. |
| Mime 2004-11-28 ch 1, | "...And I am not a lunatic." I love that line. XD |
| SarahB0123 2004-08-20 ch 1, | i like this poem alot!! It was really good. I like how you repeat the they can't see you... lines twice to make it more like a song. I love the poem good job! |
| Suyu 2004-08-17 ch 1, | that was really good. keep going. |
| SiliconeInflatedHeart 2004-08-17 ch 1, | i like this. the way it flows. and the ending. "After your death, I buried you in the corner,"- my favorite line |