wow.
i think that'd make for a beautiful song.

M.
Nice.
I especially liked the switch of word order in the third line of the final refrain, it made me try to look more deeply into the whole poem.

Vampy! ^_^ There's a few lines I really like... "trying so hard to be truely false"... "you can only change the shell"... Sometimes I wish to high heaven I didn't care so much about some people. Nice job; would love to hear it (I'm assuming you have a melody in your head).