I like the ending, it's like a song and it's cool.

I seriously cannot find anything to critisize in this, it flowed very nicely! amazing job.

While I like this one, I think because of its format, I think it could be compounded to something a bit shorter. With poems with short lines, I think they become more powerful the shorter the poem is as a whole, as it packs more of a punch, I guess you could say.

The last stanza is great. I like that it is similar to the first, but still says something different. The first says "I will wither away," but the last one says "I will not stay." Maybe I look too much into it, but the meaning changes, and I like the kind of mystery it has.

This reminded me of that saying-- like, "Don't follow me for I may not lead." A lot like that. Creative spin, really. Good job!

Yikes. Not sure it was your mission to cause a shiver, but damn. That's the kind of piece that haunts you long after you've read it. Nicely done.

beautiful. simple perfection. i especially love the lines: Hold me to the light,
Burn me away.
Keep me in the dark,
I will not stay.
good job!!

Powerful. I really can relate to what your saying. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.