1. Ted seems kinda lusty.
2. That's creepy. That the star smelled like lemonade. Because up until now I thought Ailis was just clever, not psychic or anything. The things that she said and did seemed to be things that you could do by just watching and listening. I mean up until the star.

I just have to tell you beforehand that I'm really sorry that I've criticized you in pretty much every single review I've given so far. It's not that the story is bad, I really love it, its just that it has so much potential in my eyes and I feel like pointing them out. I'm really sorry...
I don't think that Randy, who is failing every subject at school, drunk-driving, and everything else, would be that angry about his family members not liking him. I mean maybe he could, but even then be probably wouldn't want to show it. He looks to me like the kind of guy who has too much pride to admit any fault or kindness that he has. So... I don't really think he'd throw pillows at the wall like that.
But. Great chapter, I love the story, and again I'm so sorry for criticizing you so much.

I don't like Ted so much, but I love Ailis and Randy. Natasha's not so bad either. Your characters are so realistic, it's amazing.

Wow. I love it so far, the characters drew me in quickly and I love how eccentric Allis is. Stars of wax...you're right, there is something sad, crazy, and poetic about that. The characters are so real..

Very interesting...very interesting...but i like!

The only thing in this chapter that I found a little maybe-not-too-believable was how quick Ted seems to start to like Ailis. I think that's something that only happens with girls. I mean anyone can be attracted to someone physically right away, but actually getting to like someone as a person takes guys more time. And its not as if they're taking time to realize it, it genuinely takes them more time than it does girls to be attracted to someone.
This is true with Randy too. I think he goes soft on her a little quick. I don't mean to be rude or picky and being accurate about how quick a person can be attracted to someone else isn't that important storyline-wise. But it could be reality-wise and... that's all. :)
But anyway I really liked this chapter, Ted seems like a really sweet guy.

wow... ailis is a cool character. there was also an atmosphere of mystery surrounding her i thought. keep writing!

lol. i love randy's character! haven't read many funny (as in humor, not weird) characters on this site.

short for a first chapter, but effective. i want to read more...

What ever happened to the name Allis? Her name was allis in chapter 1 and chapter 2 and then in this chapter its Ailis. Did you change your mind about her name or something? If you did, I like Allis better if it matters. Its like Alice spelled uniquely, and Alice is a nice name. Anyway...
I really like the way you brought Natasha into the story and how and why Ted and Ailis are going to meet. Everyone else uses lame overused stories like, one of them had to tutor the other or they had to do a project together or some crap like that. This is pleasantly original but not too wild to be impossible.

this seems like a really good story. its very original so far, compared to all the other stories that are out there. i like the idea of the wax stars, allis seems pretty interesting.