I love this!!
ONe of the very best poems i've read here on FP, and i've read a fair share :D
i love the imagery, it borders between the fantastical and sick (in a good way!) :D

Cheers!
D

Interesting... very sweet.

Reminds me of ice cream.

cool poem!...but i really reviewed this to say: how long did it take you to write your account thing? It is crazy long. Super-crazy-long. Uber-super-long. Big.ps- poem is now a fave...nice writing.

You must write an essay condemning raptor!

Heya!

i think i'll have to agree with you on this one...yeah...i really like this...there is a certain sense of obsession in here...i LOVE it! XD yeah...there really is nothing more that i can say...

actually, i was wondering if you'd like to read some of my my stuff...yeah, i'm kinda new and i'd like to have some opinions on my work or even better, get pointed in the right direction...

i'll be reading ur stuff, and i also read your entire profile...its HUGE! i don't think that i will submit a review for every single piece you've posted, unless there is one that really moves me, and then i'll pile evrything up in one review...

love you!

~Tabitha

You're correct: this is a piece bordering on excellence. The visual is near perfect.

Cute stuff, I like how it's short and sweet and to the point. Keep it up.

I got some naughty images in my mind. *shifty eyes*

Nice work. Clever.

Keep writing sweetie.

-Seras Nova

^_^ OK then and yes i was seriouse

very nice peice,thanx for the review

this. is. so. **. awsome.

no more needs to be said.

It just... flows. The words and the momentment and the rythm.

I should be studying for midterm. -twitch-

Wonderfully delicate. Well done.

I can understand what you are trying to convey when you do not capitalise your poems or insert punctuation.

You are a gifted writer.

Damn you to hell! You are allowed to touch MrFlames special places...curses!

Jealousy aside, this was a really good piece, I love the post-modern free-form style of poetry and this was a good example, keep it up!