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Amber Harp 2008-07-15 ch 19,	abuseWow. Just... damn. I've probably liked this story and felt the instant connection to it more than any other story I've read so far. I mean, not literally being in the same situations as Neely or Chris or Devon but... I don't know. I felt a connection to this story that I think everyone else could feel. The situations and semi-realistic-ness of it all just amazed me a bit. Sure, there were those situations that made me think were a bit in over my head but there were even more situations in this story that made me nod along and think, "I know how you're feeling!" I don't know, I'm being a ball of cheesiness right now. This story really got me think and reading back to some parts over and over just to confirm that you really, really wrote it. Neely and Devon are BEYOND the point of cute - they're too much for that petty word. Gabrielle and Chris? Don't even get me started. Also, what happened to Steven? He hasn't showed up much to cause drama or anything remotely close. I feel bad for Shauna but you were right when you said in your author's note (sadly, I really do read EVERY single word of author's notes): "You may hate her now but I can bet that if you had a person like Shauna in your life you would like her too, just like Neely, and be scared to admit your feelings." Something along those lines, anyways, it was a few chapters ago. The truth is, I actually DO have someone like that in my life. She's so perfect and nice that you can't help but love her and WANT to hate her at the same time. Shane... was a bit of a surprise for me. I absolutely DID NOT expect that coming. He's... dark. I like him :) And when the scene of Steven having a cold and explaining why, "Just camping out at three in the morning to watch someone I really care about." I literally fell off of my chair. I was like, "DUDE! HE KNOWS, HE KNOWS, HE KNOWS!" Yeah, I overreact. Eh, I rambled A LOT on this review. And there are probably a gazillion grammar errors. Sorry 'bout that. I guess I got carried away with my love for this story, even if you haven't written a chapter for over a year... It kind of makes me sad. I wanted to see this story so badly finished too, but I know you have your reasons for discontinuing it. Hopefully, it's just a one-year delay like the last time? Yeah, I hope so.
Hop Skip Jump 2008-07-14 ch 19,	abusePlease finish it before my head explodes...
StarEyed14 2008-07-13 ch 13,	abuseNO! This chapter was so SAD! Anyway.. sorry for not reviewing in the earlier chapters.. I just found the story and I couldn't stop reading lol! But I couldn't NOT review after this chapter. You're amazing! -stareyed14
julie 2008-07-13 ch 11, anon.	abusesometimes I just hate steven but other times i think he's sweet and cute.
julie 2008-07-13 ch 6, anon.	abusehow can neely be so clueless!?!
mipster 2008-07-12 ch 19,	abuseI read your story for awhile ago and I never left a review. After you never updated, I just kinda forgot about your story. But I recently stumbled upon it again and was looking forward to seeing it updated but it was not. So I went to your website for All Along to see if you were ever planning on updating. I found and read your entry about you being upset about that everyone was writting similar stories and people who were telling you that your story was cliche and not an original. You said that it made you want to quit your story. And I guess it really did because since then you haven't updated for over a year. I just wanted to let you know that you shouldn't give up because of crap like that. On fictionpress once a story becomes popular a million other versions come out later. Like how after False Facades by Maeven got insanely popular so many stories about a girl who snuck into an all boys boarding school came out. I believe it is much similar to your story. People can't come up with their own crap anymore so they copy what someone else very talented has already done. Also, I would like to point out that every story has some cliche parts. It is hard to avoid writting some kind of cliche because people have been writting since the creation of language. That means that someone somewhere in the past has written something just like any story being written now. With romance stories it is even harder to avoid some cliche aspects. To me I see a cliche in every single story that I read. A good author is one who can take a cliche and make it their own, mold it into something great. I believe that you have done that. Your story is an original because it's got depth and reality and characers who are actually devolped. And the whole falling for you brother's best friend cliche, you made into your own, you made it different, and you made a great story. So don't listen to crap that everyone says about it being so cliche. Really cliche stories are ones that don't go away from the plot line for a cliche at all. That's not you. People say cliche like it's a bad omen, but if they ever stopped to look at all of the stories out there they'd see cliches everywhere in every single one. And everyone knows that cliches are there because let's face it, in some way they are seen in real life. I just felt like I needed to tell you how original and great your story is. You are one of the talented writers one this site. Your story is so developed and deep and it shines amongst the stories that are only skin deep cliches written by terrible authors. You should ignore all the crap that people say. They say it because they are so ignorant they don't know what else to say but "It's cliche". They should get over it. They're reading it aren't they? You are so talented and I'd hate to see you give up and never finish this story. So many people read and love this story. Hell, your even in the SKOW hall of fame for being nominated and winning so many times. Don't give up. Don't waste your talent. Don't listen to crap like that. This story is too good and has come too far for it never to be finished. I don't even know if you read your reviews anymore, but if you still do, I hope that you will come across this and be inspired to write again. I hope that in some way this review will help you to get past the crap that people say and to write again. Mip*
knj323 2008-07-11 ch 2,	abuseim in the same boat as the last person to leave a review please update i'm dying
Sydney 2008-07-11 ch 19, anon.	abuseOkay, so it is currently 4:39 AM and I've stayed up for about six hours reading this story through, and it was amazing! Anyway, I have the tendency to only read completed stories, and I must admit that I thought that this was a completed story (for some reason) before reading it. So imagine my surprise (and utter heartbreak) when I get to the last chapter and realize that it was not finished yet and hadn't been updated for about a year! So I'm PLEADING you to please please please update this wonderful story! I'll go on my knees and grovel if I have to, but I'm so completely in love with Neely and Devon that I would be willing to leave my dignity behind. Bravo on an excellent, marvelous story. Please finish it for the sake of your adoring fans!
Ryette 2008-07-10 ch 19,	abuseI am in LOVE with this story. oh my god. and then i saw that there were no updates for...a year!! and I ** in my pants. I love you, I love this, I love your characters...so please update??
shesabeautyx 2008-07-08 ch 19,	abuseSo I just started reading this story a while ago, and finally got to this point. I have to say that I'm completely in love with it. I wasn't at first -- and don't take this as an insult but looking at the amount of reviews I got I was probably expecting something extraordinary and im usually a VERY picky reader... but I sat through the first few chapters, which were decent, but then about 6 or 7 chapters into the story I think your writing style drastically improved and I seriously started enjoying it instead of just wanting to get through it. There were a couple points in the story where my eyes were tearing up, and yeah im a hopeless romantic and a crybaby but still... being able to envoke emotion in a reader is a huge accomplishment for the author, atleast in my opinion. I'm not going to rave about your plot -- it's one of the biggest cliches like, ever. But I think you carried it out really well. I absolutely loved your writing style and humor. The characters are absolutely awesome. I have to say that I think this Chris/Gabrielle storyline could use a little more.. depth. But they are the secondary couple so I guess it makes sense as to why their storyline develops quicker. I absolutely love Neely. She's an awesome protagonist, and I love the celeb- look alike that you picked out for her. I think it fits her perfectly - someone that's naturally beautiful. I think she's someone that many of us can relate to, which makes it even better to read about her. And Devon... if I didn't love him with Neely so much, I'd be tempted to go into the story and steal him for myself.. lol. What an amazing guy. And he's a virgin? I seriously need a real life version of him. And if he looks like Tom welling, then thats just icing on the cake. I adore Shane. I think his character has so much depth and I would totally read a sequel about him. I actually don't hate Shauna either... I think her and steven would make a cute couple actually. That's probably out of nowhere, but it's like I think steven is such a sweetie and deserves an amazing girl and shauna seems pretty genuine too. So yanno, if you wanted another sequel just throwing an idea out there ;) And Allison.. I just don't really understand her point in the story except for sitting next to Neely during lunch. If they're such good friends then shouldn't Neely atleast tell her stuff about Devon? Also, I'm like 99.9% sure that Chris already has to know about Neely and Devon... because he called her dense and oblivious and it was pretty obvious he was talking about Devon... right? Like those one liners would be kind of pointless if he threw a fit over them... Okay I could praise and critique all day, but it's 2 in the morning and I have class tomorrow. Overall, your story is amazing and I'm hoping for an update -- which I hope is coming soon cause it's been almost a year! AH, I don't think I can wait that long. Judging that you said there were 6-7 chapters left 3 chapters ago... you only have about 4 more left. So please? Update? Okay, last critique. I don't think it's fair that you're thanking only the reviewers that read your authors note. I read them, but I mean I think anyone that takes the time to actually review should be thanked... Okay, I'm done for real now. Great job... && I'll be looking forward to an update :) red.
CamilleBelle 2008-07-05 ch 19,	abuseAH, this was such a god chapter! Please update soon!*
CamilleBelle 2008-07-05 ch 17,	abuseYou're brilliant...I love this story...and this chapter...go Chris...screw you steven...love Gabrielle...and a massive woop shout out for Neely for punching someone...and the biggest WOOP YAY claps hands together for Neely and Devon...must be love, love, love! Ah, loving it!
CamilleBelle 2008-07-05 ch 16,	abuseYeah, this is exactly how I presumed the first kisses would play out. Of course Gabrielle wouldn't fall head over heals for Chris at the first kiss, she isn't that type of girl. But :]:]:] for Devon and Neely...much, much love!! Honestly adding you to my favourite Authors list, you are just so - talented!
CamilleBelle 2008-07-05 ch 15,	abuseOMG! OMG! OMG! This was seriously your BEST chapter yet, honestly AHH!! I even re-read it, it was so fantastic! Just the whole chapter was great, and I don't mean just the kissing parts(even though the neely/devon was defiantly the BEST). I just loved this chapter! :] I cannot get over it, lol. Okay back to reading it now, ah I love you woman!
CamilleBelle 2008-07-04 ch 13,	abuseWow, this chapter was really good, even though Devon and Neely left on a bad note. The start was - so cute! I just wish they btoh weren't so dense, lol. But as you said, it is what makes the story. Really impressed with this chapter!

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