It's a painful tale. Love with fences is just so painful.

so very cute! and it had awesome rhythm. I liked the rhyming thingy

Until my mind and heart can’t disagree.. i don't get it.. wouldnt make makes sense to be until tehy do agree?
Anyhow.. nice rhyming and very cool poem.. sadn though

Wow, I loved this. Forbidden love, and all that jazz. Three lines just rubbed me the wrong way. First of all, the two lines in your rhyme scheme that end "way" and "waking day"? No, I think you can do better than that. Those rhymes are overused, in my opinion. Third line is "Multiply strife". Sorry, but I have to say "Ick." It sounds like the only reason you put that line in is because strife rhymes. And that's no way to write poetry. Hope you write more, love the ending to this!