| Reviews for Balcairn |
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Natari Mirumura 5/25/12 . chapter 1Short but nice, as this poem said what it had to say. Very nice job, keep it up . |
wo bu ai ni le 6/7/09 . chapter 1WOW. Such a strong message in such a short poem, I love it. It makes the reader continue to think of the implications. A great thought! fleur |
One-Hand Clap 4/19/08 . chapter 1Oh! How perfectly you summed up those feelings of unworthiness everpresent in relationships. I loved it! And I also loved the bluntness of it. It wasn't flowery, or full of symbolism. It was straight to the point! Superb. - Clap Trap, Review Marathon (link in my profile) |
Summerdazed 9/4/07 . chapter 1i know how this feels...amazing how even such few words can make a masterpiece. anyway, i stumbled across your page and am amazed at the number of works you have! _ review me if you're free. summerdazed |
x.Insanely Serene.x 4/11/07 . chapter 1wow... i can't believe how... that hit deep... i really liked it! |
MaryJane 9/29/04 . chapter 1 Hey, Wow, great work. Simple but just plain awesome. Keep writing! Bless. |
frugale 9/12/04 . chapter 1Well, it sure wasn't a haiku (5-7-5), but who can scold you for putting an eight-word poem in the haiku section? Great piece of work, simply pure contrast put into words. |
i-kill-4-fun 8/27/04 . chapter 1its so deep in such a small peice of work. |
Rhamantus 8/24/04 . chapter 1I think this has the potential to be a good poem, but there are a couple of things worth mentioning about it: - It's not really a haiku; I guess that just means it's misfiled, but yeah. A haiku is made of 3 lines with a syllable pattern of 5-7-5 (I hear it's a bit of a different concept in Japanese, but not speaking the language, I don't understand it). A haiku is not just a short poem. - There's not much to this poem. I don't mean in length; a short poem can say a lot. However, there are only two key words in this poem: "beauty" and "ugliness". Both of these are abstract words, and as such don't convey anything specific to the audience. After all, beauty and ugliness mean different things to different people. I like the idea, though; if you expanded it, it would be an excellent poem. I hope I didn't sound too harsh. |
Fabian Cortez 8/23/04 . chapter 1Damn that's so powerfully sad. Well Done Keep Writing! F.C |
AntiPleasure 8/22/04 . chapter 1Ah, another haiku.. I like it, straight to the point. Awwhh I know how you feel if this is coming from experience. Jenna xoxo |
Black Earrings 8/22/04 . chapter 1Damn...this Haiku rocks! I felt power in your words, though there were few. Your pen is your sword, so run with scissors! I don't know what that means. I just made it up right now. See? THAT'S how much I like this poem. It inspired me right away. |
BrokenDreamsAtMidnight13 8/22/04 . chapter 1I think you said it all! Trust me i know how it feels! - Peace |
Manuel Fajar 8/22/04 . chapter 1Stark thought. -m- |
Ephemeral Seraphim 8/21/04 . chapter 1I think that this was wonderfully written, and the comparison was nicely pulled off, though I personally don't think that you're ugly :) Keep up the wonderful work. Hasta luego. chibichocobo G-Unit: I think you're beautiful on the inside. Don't worry what's on the outside. Read my Shadows of Darkness. I'm on chibichocobo's favorite list. G-Unit Ashley |