Nick, Nick, you do so well! Please, oh please, write some more!

wow...this is good. I enjoyed this.

Hi Nicholas,

I found your story "Ghosts War" while searching for some WWII horror stories. After reading your biog, I was very enthusiastic about reading the story.

After reading the story I was very disappointed. While the ghost squad idea is certainly workable, as it has been done many times before, your knowledge of World War Two is abysmal! There were no Allied troops anywhere near Berlin in 1944. A small group of soliders is not a platoon. The death camps were not known about by the average solider, much less abandoned in 1944. A Mustang was a fighter, not a bomber. Etc, etc, etc.

Why waste a situation like WWII, already rife with horror, when you don't use any of the atmostphere or settings? You might as well have put the story in a big American city, considering that the Nazis sound like a street gang.

As for the story, it was a mess. There is no consistant POV, which makes it very hard to follow. The dialog is the same for every character and completely inconsistant with the situation. There is no internal logic, somethig every good horror story needs in order to make the supernatural elements plasuable. Your grammar is nonexistant, tenses don't agree and you, very simply put, use the wrong words in many cases.

I would recommend a good editor before you post.

I remember reading this story on fanfiction. I liked it a lot and the idea itself was really cool. Any stories or movies about WWII always seems to catch my fancy. Don't why but it's always something that's kept me looking. Great job on it Nick! Keep up the good work!

There are too many spelling errors in this story for me to enjoy it. The errors that I came across suggest that you posted this story before editing it properly; perhaps you should step away from the story, then return and edit it.
You also have far too many redundant words and phrases. These can be removed, too.

Second to review! Anyway... Nick, you did a nice job with this one. The premise was something I wouldn't read on a daily basis, but this kept me going. Nicely done.

Vengence can sometimes be truly sweet as this story clearly demonstrates. However, I think this Ghost of War piece is too damn good to let those minor typos & switched tenses go without correction! Your readers will continue to apprecitate your creative imagination as I do. Such as easy fix would make this a more effective & powerful story and your fans will applaud your efforts!