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| Vayerly 2004-08-22 ch 1,   | I liked this. I can tell that it's very personal... it gives me the sense that I can't tap into what the speaker is really trying to say, and it's that vagueness that keeps me interested. One suggestion... take out the astericks... I think they take away from the seriousness of the poem. Good work. |