this was great! i sense there is more beneath the words than just what we read. excellent poem

-kiran

=D I like this. It's simple, but the imagery used is still good. The only part I had a gripe about was 'clear blue sky' - simply because it's been used a lot of times already. I can't see anything else to nitpick at (though a little punctuation would be nice, but that's my personal preference). Good work! =D
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technically okay (Wusai)

While my personal beliefs differ from those set forth here, I enjoyed this poem. I like that you chose to speak from the diety's point of view, rather than the seeker's. That gives the piece a bit more scope, I think. I also like the echoes in the first three lines.