Surprisingly, thats a great first poem. My first poem was "An uplifting poem"...not as good as yours lol. Keep writing.

Jaded,SwimmerGirl

I love your poem, and yes, I've felt like this. I think that's why I became a nightowl in the first place.

sorry! Wrong first poem!! please don't hurt me!
erm... yes, i'm strange, but my poems make sense...
anyhoo! -- excellent! bravo, dear lady!! you should write more!

This was your first poem? It's brilliant! I think I'd better go and read more of your stuff!

Wowness! That was good and it was like the words were meant to be there. Kind of ironic that my first poem was about the brightening night sky too. Yours was just better way better!

Not bad at all for a first poem. I can't remember my first poem, but I do remember some earlier ones I wrote way back when, and they were all terrible. Anyway, what I'm trying to say is nice work.
The only thing that struck me as awkward within the poem are the lines, "The sun brings reality/Like a snake." I believe I understand what you're trying to say, but the visual of a snake doesn't seem to fit well within the atmosphere you've created in the poem. Stars, night, twilight, sky, clouds...it gives a whimsical, almost dream-like scene. Then when you stick in a snake, my mind immediately shifts over to a rattler in a desert. This causes the poem to lose a bit of its focus. Still, very nice, I thought it was good.