Such powerful writing . . . I love it. Keep it up!

Nice rhyming theme in this one. I particualarly love the lines:
"I can hardly see through tears so deep.
They form a puddle of sapphire pain" Sapphire pain is just so original and has a dark, chilling beauty to it. Keep it up!
Hawke

Intersting. It kinda reminds me of my poem "caged"...
Anyways, great work here. ;)
Daphne