Aw, this was very nice! Succinct, to the point, and ranging the broader details of your concept wonderfully! Great job! I liked Tamora, Timon, and Jonas too. Chapter two was perhaps my favourite chapter. My only criticism is that the dialogue was not spaced out, when a new person began speaking. It made it a bit difficult to read. Otherwise, great story! Your time scheme was also very nice - it moved with velocity but was not so fast that the events were difficult to follow. Great job!

- Selah!

lol "no flames"- man you didn't need to say that! It was good, but too short of course :P And you need to go update assassin now!
Umm comments *racks brain*. Obviously because it had a word limit, you needed to speed things up quickly which I thought you did excellently! And the dialogue was good, especially the slang. I guess all I have to say is please write more next time! :) Cos I love reading your stuff!
Love,
Carmen

Its really good! carry on the good work!

Hey your story is pretty cool! I REALLY want to continue reading!! Please update soon ^^