I'm happy to find an author who can differentiate past, present and future tenses as well as use them wisely. I like how you use short sentences at certain parts of the story to emphasize the point.

For something short, you have plenty of character in your cat. You effectively catch the cats 'emotions'. Nothing too complex, because the cat leaves her at her death, it thinks of its own self, it's survival. But still, it feels the loneliness and emptiness, and this is quite accurate. I applaud you on that, far too many authors give their animal characters too much of complex emotions that just jarrs the story.

Finally, (because I'm trying to keep this short) your ending works very well for this story. I'm a big believer in powerful endings, because while the entire story flow is important, a memorable powerful ending defines the story. The fact that the cat ends up just like it was, with the memory of this woman in his memories, and the fact that it wants to end up again her arms wraps the story perfectly. I noticed it made your other reviewers cry.

So congratulations on a story well done.

Jamie

I think the word for this is 'sweet'.

Depressingly sweet, like the last cotton candy in the world, you see? Yes, well, anyway, I -like- this. Very good job.

And thanks for the review. :)

Aw... I think I'm going to cry. You made me sad now. No, I'm joking. I love the animal point of view and you did a wonderful job with it. Poor little mongrel. (The cat, not you.)

God that was beautiful. I found my self crying when it finished. That's a really powerful story you've written there.

This makes me want to cry... It's so sweet and poignant. Surely someone will take care of the poor kitty cat? Some family? The maid? This makes me wonder if you've seen an abandoned home, before and after it's abandonment.

Wow it's touching. I found it ironic that it ended for the cat much the same as it began: as a stray.
Poor, poor kitty.
You did a good job for a short story. Usually can't get all that into something so short.

aww thats so sad! :( reminds me of my kitty. i had 2 leave hi m in florida when i moved.