aw, that was sad yet nicely written!! happy late birthday, jake!!

oh...That's very touching and beautiful. )-:

Lovely. Sad, but lovely.

The lady from the forest is from the other poem right? it's neat how you connected the two like that. I also like the ending and how it wraps up the whole poem. it's a sad..but well written ending! :)

Someone deserves some sympathy. Happy birthday Jake. I've felt like this... I actualy turned 16 a few weeks ago a few days after a major heartbreak. Nice poem, it holds its own. One critisism: I dont think the lady of the forsest line and the line after fit with the rest of the poem. Give me an IM sometime. Or R&R anything of mine that looks interesting. Critisism is welcome.

Just to clear up some confusion, the Lady of the Wood line refers to my poem "Hidden Grove". ALso, I want to say thanks to you guys.

Very moving. I was confused by one line about the "lady of the forest," (I don't know what that's supposed to mean) but other than that, the poem was great.

This is a tragic poem! But I like it.
Happy birthday Jake!
-Lord Zuriel-

Oh, happy birthday happy birthday happy birthday happy birthday. For he's a jolly good fellow...
Are you feeling better? Great poem by the way, keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.