Reviews for For the Attention of Another

Reviews For: For the Attention of Another

security pillow 2007-06-29 ch 5,	abuseOh. Dear. God. Help, really. Help. Please? Do you have an imagination? At all? Or is this some excuse for a humor story, cause honestly, if it's supposed to be humor, it's pretty damn funny. In a rather lost and helpless sort of way. I'm sorry, I know I sound mean. I mean, you have a good plot, but it sounds like the work of a nine year old. The whole flashback section--what WAS that? It's like a soap opera. A very poorly planned soap opera. I know, I sound terrible. I really am sorry about that... It's just that... Ugh. This story needs so much help that... I don't even know where to start. And, please, tell me what kind of teacher says anything below 100 fails? That's incredibly unrealistic. As is the way no one seems to understand what the other is talking about. And, who is this Chris character? Does he have a life? Is there supposed to be a moral to this? Is there a theme? I found it just so blatantly obvious. I could have told you the entire story[save for Chris, cause that STILL doesn't make sense.] after reading the first chapter. Do I dare ask why it is that Justin leaves the park "slowly" and then Charles manages to be pedaling as fast as he can, and still doesn't make it to Justin's house until after Justin has gotten in and out of the bath? WHAT?! It's so. Wow. Pathetically unbelievable. And, I know, I know. I'm sounding absolutely terrible here. But, I have to ask. Have you ever cut yourself before? Have you known anyone who cuts? Cause you description just doesn't make sense to me. At all. You don't just sorta stab yourself with a safety pin, then decide to kill yourself! It's such a bad interpretation. Please, keep writing, don't stop on account of me. Just, for future reference. Don't go so fast. Write about things you understand. Try harder. Way harder.
Logical and serene megadeat... 2005-10-26 ch 5,	abuseI love this story T-T
WarriorHeart 2004-10-05 ch 5,	abuseloved it! great job. i actally liked the way it ended a lot, so i don't think you need and epilogue.
rainbowskye 2004-09-27 ch 5,	abuseWith regards to an epilogue, I think that if you could do one where it's not rushed (because I read one of them and it kinda ruined the whole thing) and doesn't destroy the atmosphere of the ending (because I liked that smiles) go for it, but don't write one just for the sake of writing one, where it doesn't add to the story or whatever. And without one the reader is left to think on what they think would happen with the relationship which can be bad (in a way) because we're curious people and we wanna know if the characters stay together and are happy, y'know the fairy tale ending, on the other hand it's good doing that because it's a lot more of a 'real' ending as you're not giving them some artificial thing just for a 'they all lived hapilly ever after.' shrugs yeah, I had fun rambling :)
maggie 2004-09-26 ch 5, anon.	abusewhat?!?!..just an epilogue?!?!...you should write 10 more chapters!!..i love this story!...please don't end it with just an epilogue!...--Maggie
WarriorHeart 2004-09-22 ch 4,	abusegreat chapter.
Staris 2004-09-16 ch 4,	abuseomgosh...maybe it's cuz i had a rough day today, but seriously this ending chapter like caused me to tear up! please don't have Justin do it! Like... have Charles confess his love for Justin and all will work itself out in time!! but i have this bad feeling that this won't be that happy of an ending... cries/sniffles i'm going to need some serious kleenex boxes if you are going to make the next two chapters anywhere near as sad as this one!! but nicely written! update soon! and maybe go for the happy ending? ^.^;;
rainbowskye 2004-09-16 ch 4,	abuseNo, no, no! Silly Justin! Bad Justin! That is, of course, if I'm thinking of the right thing. Can't wait to read the resolution.
rainbowskye 2004-09-13 ch 3,	abuseYou got my attention... I'm eager to know what's going to happen next nods And nice impact by having the last sentence on it's own, certainly got me.
WarriorHeart 2004-09-12 ch 3,	abuseGreat chapter! A good way to get other people to review your work is to review theirs. Some will do it in appreciation, others will if you ask them to check it out. Good luck and keep writing!
Dani S 2004-09-12 ch 3,	abuseI liked this view a lot although at times it was a little confusing. Very good though, it compliments your first two chapters. Keep up the great work :)
WarriorHeart 2004-09-04 ch 2,	abuseAh! So good! Update soon!
WarriorHeart 2004-08-28 ch 1,	abuseYes, you did leave us hanging. DAMN IT!! winks I'll be back to find out what happenes. But on a more personal note, I started to laugh when I read the part about him turning on MTV or VH1 in the mornings, cause I do that myself. Also, I happened to be listening to 'She Will Be Loved' during that part... I really like this so far, update soon!
Dani S 2004-08-28 ch 1,	abuseI like your story so far Zakuyoe. I hope that you continue writing so that we can all find out what Justin plans on doing with his troubles; how he deals with them. I am also curious as to what happened with the safety pin, so please continue on it.

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