 Kur'denras 2004-08-30 . chapter 1Good poem. There's a little constructive criticism I'd like to put in, though. Your rhythm doesn't stay the same, a good consistent rhythm helps you get into the flow of the poem. Also, there's a few points where you rhyme things that... well... don't rhyme. I.e. dream-seemed, decreed-agree, answer-after. The poems good though, and I like the message. What I say though is that good things come to those who can recognize good things.
-Kur'denras
P.S. Sorry for misinterpreting your previous poem.
P.P.S. I do agree with all your other things (as stated in your bio.) |