Really good, I guess I consider this a thought provoker. Written very well, loved how the words flowed in this.

Okay, I don't think you were describing a colony of sea monkeys though that was my intitial reaction. Other comments- Very good rhyming, compensates for the iffy meter. And you used the word "brine!" I mean you can't beat that. I love it when I find a seldom used word. ^.^ N e ways, I demand more slave! So go scribble!

**Scars**