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| hoorabuddha 2007-12-29 ch 1,  | abuseWow, good job. I like it a lot, I'm just a little confused. Was it the same teacher messing around with both girls, or was it a different one? Still, it's really good and really well written. * (that's a crappy internet version of five stars) :D |
| d666lisa 2007-10-26 ch 1, | abuseBEAUTIFUL |
| His Dark Mistress 2007-08-06 ch 1, | abuseI loved this, very well written. The the style you used was pulled of wonderfully. |
| Damned Dead Eyes 2006-05-15 ch 1, | abuseOh, I like it! Good job! |
| JD 2006-03-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis is very descriptive. I like it. |
| denihines 2005-08-30 ch 1, | abusethanks, deni :) |
| Odyssey-Quest 2005-07-22 ch 1, | abuseI wish you would continue this because it could be a really good story! ...Not that it's bad now - I love it. Think about continuing though, okay? |
| Gem 2004-12-18 ch 1, anon. | abuseO, this story has its very own uniqueness, and I admire it a lot. Well written story, although sometimes it can be a bit confusing, but that's probably just me! Anyway, great job! ^_^ |
| mourn-today 2004-09-18 ch 1, anon. | abusedamn you woman... making people think this could happen with their gorgeous world his...nvm maybe thats just me. i love the story well written |
| Sugar Jones 2004-09-11 ch 1, | abuseI liked this. Its something I normally dont read, but this was good. I loved the POV used too. Nicely done. -Taryn :o) |
| Siberia1 2004-09-05 ch 1, | abuseAbsolutely wonderful! Is this based on your real life? (If it is, I'm a little concerned for your well-being.) I ask because I was completely drawn into the moment with the narrator, as if I was experiencing what she was experiencing. Your narrative style is quite unique. I think you're the first person on this website I've encountered who uses "you" instead of "I" or "s/he". The main character's emotions captivated me from beginning to end. I'm envious of your talent. Two thumbs up! b^_^d I have a story called "Unravel" that you might be interested in. It may not be as "naughty" as yours, but I believe it has its own particular charm. Read the summary if you're curious. :) |
| vintage fade 2004-08-30 ch 1, | abuseVery descriptive, with a good point. I don't usually go for stories like this, but I did enjoy this one. You did a great job, and I loved it. Great job! Vintage Fade |
| Robert W Wells 2004-08-30 ch 1, | abusevery nice work, bit confusing though |