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| the cereal killer 2004-10-02 ch 1,  | abuseThat was painful. I can't believe I've never read anything else by you before, because you are so amazing. "seven-tone eyes and/earthswept hair with freckles/in your laugh to carry/him who needs/no one and everyone" You make me feel so terrible for writing poetry that's so seemingly long-winded as compared to yours. |
| Sugar On The Asphalt 2004-09-22 ch 1, | abuseOh god, this is my favorite poem. It knoweth all. What imagery. What smell. Congratulations. |
| JazzPizza 2004-09-16 ch 1, | abuseI adore this. I really can't say anything else at the moment; only that as haunting as this is, I believe "him who needs" is probably more grammatically correct as "he who needs"...that is all. |
| Project Autumn 2004-09-16 ch 1, | abuseI love this. I love the musical references, and the beautiful descriptions you use. You describe certain things like no one else does, and yet the descriptions make perfect sense as if they've been used forever. The last stanza is absolutely wonderful; it's one of those endings that makes you go "Ohh," at the end, if you follow my meaning. :) Your artistic wording is amazing. So good. |
| Paste on Smile 2004-09-13 ch 1, | abusewow. I just read that multiple times...abslutlely wonderful |
| do not resuscitate 2004-09-08 ch 1, | abuseoh wow. this is unmeasurably beautiful. i love this to absolute death. |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2004-09-04 ch 1, | abuseyour metronome & his pulse on the same measures Beautiful, jaw-droppingly so. |
| zelle 2004-09-02 ch 1, | abuse... heart. break. I want to hug you now. Can I hug you? 'Cause that last stanza was what did it. You broke me, woman. |
| amber 2004-08-31 ch 1, anon. | abusewow that's really beautiful...I heart you Chris! ::hugs you tight:: maybe you need to truely unload on me sometime...lord knows I do it often enough to you. |
| Faithless Juliet 2004-08-30 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was truly beautiful. I loved all of the abstract imagry and how you identified feelings with objects and moments in time, truly beautiful. Keep up the good work. Much love, Juliet. |