Cool! I'm inclined to sy your best one yet!

I absolutely love this one. You're kind of plunged into the poem. I adore the last stanza. In fact, I love this whole thing. Yay for you! Awesome stuff, keep it up.

Whoa. I got a bunch of html tags EVERYWHERE! Maybe you should check and see if the html is ok? From what I could decipher of the poem, it was nice. I liked the numb feeling spreading from the heart, it's really chilling. Keep writing.

I don't think you are aware of this but this poem is just codes and htmls.