This is really good!

This makes me think of a picture I did a while back: http://nairohe.com/kayay/gallery/cg/aav

There you go again, saying you didn't finish it right, when I think it's fine! Not that what I think matters a lot, but hey... Yay for the poem!

This is really good, sweetie! lots of emotion and I like the structure. I like the 'crystal tears/Burn harsh tracks' - stood out to me. Well written!

This is beautiful. Having been anorexic once, I can identify will the emotions in this poem. It's gorgeous... Keep writing.