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Moozs 2004-09-03 . chapter 1
Overall I like this. Your description is sparse which helps to build up a good atmosphere. I think you tell the reader too much about Shayna too soon though. I'd like to find out about her gradually, over the course of the story. Anyway I'm interested in finding out what happens.
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