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| HanLiv 2008-07-03 ch 38,  | abuseOh... (and just in case FP does that stupid thing where it deletes extra letters, that was a long, drawn-out sort of "oh"). Firstly, I have to say that this story was fantabulous. I've always fantasised about going to boarding school, but even with a scholarship I would still have had to pay some fees. Therefore, i most especially loved this :D Next, I loved the remarkable similarity to Pride and Prejudice. I wasn't a big fan of the original novel (shock), though I love Austen as a general rule, but I did very much enjoy this. It made me smile. This story was tingly and fantastic and wonderful; there were places where I thought it dragged a little and I think you could have condensed Jess' "moping" a little; however, that doesn't changed the fact that this was one of the best stories I've read on here in a long time, and I'm now off to obsessively stalk anything else you've written. --Hannah x |
| diff3rent 2008-06-26 ch 38, | abusei read your story a while ago, and i never reviewed. sorry for that...anyway, this story is amazing and i love how you developed your characters. it was a great read and i enjoyed it very much. |
| ejl91 2008-06-16 ch 38, anon. | abuseSo here goes again... I'm also glad that unlike a lot of stories, it't not all a sudden 'i'm in love with you when a minute ago i hated you'. It was a slow development, and even at the end they weren't quite there yet, which is what i loved about the ending! Another thing about your writing is that your grammar is perfect, and if one thing bugs me about written things is if people are willing to let other people read their work, it should be readable, and yours is. There are no mistakes that i could tell immediately and your style draws us in from the beginning. As i said before, i loved this from beginning to end, and I can't wait to read more of your work! |
| ejl91 2008-06-16 ch 38, | abuseI have just read this entire story over the last few days, and it is amazing! After several nights of little sleep just so i could keep reading i have finished it! I love stories which make me love them from the first chapter and you did with this, the first chapter drew me in with the introduction to the character of Jesse, and as with everything i read, if i enjoy the beginning i don't stop until i've finished it! I could have reviewed every chapter and given you long essays about what i loved about each one, but i thought i'd just stick with one at the end! The way you write is incredible, as you give us so much detail but in such small pieces, and the characters are slowly built up over a period of time and we're not just bombarded with loads of information to remember about them all at once. Although it is a very cliche plot (which i adore!) you have put your own spin on it, and created characters which everyone can relate too as i'm sure everyone knows of a Will and a Jesse. I'm not sure what the word limit on reviews is, but i'll go to another one to continue! |
| reddishrocker 2008-04-24 ch 30, | abuseHi! You know what? I just thought of something while reading this chapter: " Darcy Chase is such a B-I-T-C-H! " I thought it was really funny cuz it rhymed and stuff. :D This story is becoming more awesome every chapter! Hope you reply... |
| laurakyna 2008-03-27 ch 38, | abuseLove it! Absolutly LOVE IT!Write another! Write a hundred more! Brilliant! |
| laurakyna 2008-03-23 ch 13, | abusehas someone spiked her drink or something? |
| laurakyna 2008-03-23 ch 10, | abusesomeones in trouble! Go Jesse, Go Will! love it, gonna keep on reading... |
| laurakyna 2008-03-23 ch 8, | abusehaha Jesse! asked out! by a snob(ish) niywit! like it. actually i realy like william, and Jesse and they're so perfect for each other |
| laurakyna 2008-03-23 ch 7, | abusefunny- since when is Jesse amiable? are you mad? realy good keep at it... |
| laurakyna 2008-03-23 ch 5, | abuseyeah, your right- bridgit don't work so well... what does 'POV' stand for any way? gonna keep reading... |
| laurakyna 2008-03-23 ch 4, | abusei realy like this so im gonna keep reading... |
| laurakyna 2008-03-23 ch 2, | abusealright! i realy like Jesse! yep its good, yep i like it, yep im gonna keep reading it... |
| laurakyna 2008-03-23 ch 1, | abusesounds good so far, I like Jesse! gonna keep on reading... |
| Sydney-J 14 2008-03-13 ch 38, | abuseI loved this sotry Will is so nice I would love a guy like him any day |