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Joshua S 2008-05-02 ch 7,	abuseI like it
Darket 2005-07-05 ch 9,	abuseLike the Michael Jackson joke. That's a different version of it. I heard a different one. I know a story you should write that would totally kick ass~ A zombie story! Or not... Oh, I know youre really good at writing, and all that stuff... But there is a story of mine I wanted you to read. Or atleast just read the first two chapters. It was called Quarantine. I put a bunch of work into it, and it is the only story of mine I would ever ask you to read since my early work SUCKED. BUt that's all for me. I like this. I really need to read more. See you around.
Darket 2005-03-14 ch 6,	abuseI'm liking this story. I see you probably like Led Zeppelin. Did you know that you can listen to Led Zeppelin's stairway to heaven in reverse and hear them sing about Satan?? it's wicked and cool. Oh, that was the thing about this chapter. A quick statement. Pulling out of Iraq now would be a bad idea. We've crippled the country aand we should leave when they are rebuilt. We don't want to mess up with what happened in Afghanistan. We won a war for them and they were crippled. We leave, BAM! Taliban. Well, good story. I can't wqait until the tornadoes show up. See you around.
Darket 2005-03-09 ch 3,	abuseI loved that huge insult. People actually do that at some schools. I have a friend named john Lemay who got jusmped by two guys and he got blamed for it. This story gets better.
Darket 2005-03-08 ch 2,	abuseI'm readin'. But I want to see where this one is going. However your charachters actual show charachter. oh... I tried to type in the website in chapter 2... It didn't work.
C. Catlin 2004-12-02 ch 25,	abuseI know I ama little behind here...But I liked your other stories, and decided to read this one. This was a great peice of fiction. I laughed, I cried, I didn't want it to end.The only thing I can say to this is: Articbanna, You are one of the best writers EVER!
MercuryMoon 2004-10-31 ch 1,	abuseooh.. a first person story.. those are always good because the reader gets a good look at the inside of a character's head. Nice. I liked the Hitler/Hilter thing. Good thing you said it because i was thinking, "what? hitler..?" you have a good plot going on here from what I can tell from the first chapter. Just a few tense changes, but nothing else really to comment on. :)
james63 2004-10-16 ch 22,	abuseMan this story is really great. So are you thinking of adding Morganna to the team later. It is really going to be interesting to see how you work this story with the F5 tornado vs the team. Keep up with the great story. Till your next post.
strider1 2004-10-04 ch 1,	abuseHm, I like the way you go in depth into to narator and his home life, it allows me to visualize the happenings easily, and puts more depth to the character himself. The only problems I have are one, you change tense in the same paragraph all the time. like "My daughter Katie, who was 14, was sitting on the couch watching TV" is she 14, or was she 14? See what I mean. Next you gotta watch some of the realism, and conterversal topics. First off no self respecint parent would let a young kid dump gasoline on their lawn and light it. The dangers of doing so, especially if you enclose the fumes in a fire ant hole... Also that concoction the ex-gf made up. Well I'm no expert on chemistry, but I do know if you mix bleech and certain types of acid, you get mustard gas (yes the gas used in WWI) and you are mixing all sorts of chemicals all of which would be unbelievably dangerous, not to mention the fact that if you mix spray paint and gasoline, it will prably combust right there. So just watch out for these realism issues in the furture. Now the contreversal issues, that whole conversation about the church, not only is it conterversal, however there would never be a conversation structured in that way from a religious leader, cause you don't call it "Your church" Personally, I would omit that part becuase it isn't entierly necesairy for the background, and may save you trouble later on. Other than that, this story seems very interesting, and I will hopefully read more soon.
james63 2004-09-22 ch 18,	abuseI just wanted to say that this is a really great story. One of my favorites. Really look forward to your next update. Sorry to see Matt get killed and what a way to let Martin talk to Floyd about God's love. Really great scene. I am really surprised only one other review on this story. This is really a great story and have enjoyed it. Keep up the great work, just a few misspelled words here and there. But after all that, I love the great chase scenes also and the interaction with the tornados. Keep up the great work. hopefully more people will review for you.
Ian Bradley 2004-09-20 ch 16,	abuseBravo!

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