Quite a surreal ending... But a very good one. Very Matrix-ish, though.

Okay, interesting pair of chapters, and we finally get a bit of explanation on Goodmen's project. Nice ironic name for a mad doctor.

All I have to say is this is a nice, surreal chapter, with a vivid outburst scene, rather than the normal cliche method of writing something like "He/she got mad." It's one thing to say emotion, but another to show it.

This story reminds me of three things: The Matrix, Ghost In The Shell, and Evangelion. Perhaps it was just the name "NeRF" reminding me of NERV in Eva, but the 'mind-warping' and psychological dialogue also reminded me of it. Interesting first two chapters, though, and I'll be sure to check this one out some more.

::claps::I'm one of those guys who always expects a twist at the end, but it was still different than I thought it might be. Maybe 4 grammatical mistakes but no biggy. The beginning was sort of awkward in inconsistency of thinking to himself and talking for the reader. And the ending kinda dumped out. To make the reader go 'woah' it does have to come kind of fast, but its speed made me get confused instead of figuring out the truth along with the character. I'm not sure if you meant to, but the three characters slightly reminded me of the three sides of one person (curious/adventurous, harmonious/caring, responsible/professional). And the everyone using 'I' in the story was a cool effect. Small things like that can really add to stories; add as many small things as you can in every story so then the reader will read them twice to see them all! And I appreciate the humor, a good laugh is needed in every story.

If you don't understand something I said or need clarification feel free to ask me.

~bodango

WOW! You must have a very complex mind, huh? Excellent, it left me speechless and i had my jaw to the floor in surprise. You know how to get a reader thinking one way...then...BAM! Surprise ending! Love it, you should try at some mystery/suspence stories!
Wonderful, Jacquie

Wow. i definately wasn't expecting that. I had to read the chapter twice, but I lilke it, a twist ending worked really well on this one. Was she waking from a coma? Really, just a great story overall, awesome job on your first one! I love it, nice one for thinking. I love psychology. Anyways, great job once again, nice ending, keep writing! I want to read another story!

I got back to your story, sorry it took a while. i wrote a review for chapter 4 when I read it with the rest of the chapters, and it didn't post. It was a long review too! I spent time on it, waa. I might go back and write another review later, but right now A'm anxious to see what happens, so I'm going to go ahead and read these chapters. yeah, anyways, here goes
-I like the detailed part on him, with his thoughts. It's a part of the story that is really interesting, and develops an entire dimesion to the story. i don't know. I like his POV.
-The last lines are creepy. Really throwinga curve on everything. Oh. i must know

Another fantastic chapter, this story is unfolding quite nicely!

-I like the gaps you have between the story lines of each person and how the other people fill them i. They make it very interesting and exciting to read, and create an atmosphere.
-huh. I'm definately curous as to what's going on. And the poor roses, such a pretty flower
-2.5 kids. I love the census things. .5 of a kid has go to be interesting
-is doctor good or bad? must know, will read
Your story is very interesting and the chapters just keep on getting more and more exciting and thought provoking. This is kind of a calm right now, but so many questions. great job with it.

-this characters freaky. Right now it seems like a suspense/thriller.
-oh. She's falling in love. . .
--sodium level? what?
-craw-crawl
-oh, cliffhanger
-all the questions
next chapter

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my story. I was gone forever, but now I believe that I'll reurn the favor and read yours, I review as I go, so, here it is
-"the dreams that I think I have." Wow. That really draws the reader in. To think you have a dream?
-meet-met
-"categorizded and logged you in within their virtual card catalog of steriotypes and assumptions."- very strong, neat hrasing, creaes a nice mood.
-emaculate
-nice building of suspense/suspicion
-defiantly-definately
- Now a girl? hmm. . . I'm awaiting an explanation as to how these two parts connect. I'm sure I'll find out though. You wouldn't just leave me hanging
-ooh. I think I see the connection, but must find out. Next chaper.
-BTW, nice ending to this chapter.

Wow, this chapter was especially great! I love the ending of it, Dr. Goodmen is pretty much a "bad word". I don't like her for speaking of Gordon like that, and completely agree with Gina. I look forward to you next chapter, oh, and thank so much for reviewing my story!

This is certainly getting more and more intriguing as the chapters go on. Very well done, I look forward to the next chapter!

Hey liked the story - very dark and insightful into the human mind. Like it a lot...update it soon?