 makeshift parachute 2004-09-19 . chapter 1I love it. It gives you a pecaful, natural feeling. An envisionment of the perfect autumn day. I love the description, great job. Oh, and by the way, thanks for the review.
~Echo |
 Manuel Fajar 2004-09-15 . chapter 1Ah, satori! Wondeful description of a fall day in the North. -m- |
 simpleplan13 2004-09-09 . chapter 1very nice imagery.. awesome poem |
 Amaya Windsong 2004-09-08 . chapter 1i like this! though i'm sure i'd like it better if we hadn't lost the original. *waggles finger* lol. good job, and thanks for the review!
|rikku| |
 The Juggler 42 2004-09-08 . chapter 1A few suggestions:
Could the first line be "When the autumn wind blows"?
I liked that as the last line, the first is similar to it but I think if you used the same words it would sort of close the thought nicely.
One more thing, "Which allows me to" is awkward, and doesnt really add anything. Other than that, nice imagery. |
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