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| shinco 2007-03-29 ch 10,  | abuseOh, yeah, this one's awesome, too! The 2nd line caught me again! It gives thew illusion of all kinds of stars bursting and colliding and stuff! AWESOME! GO SHAZAAM! |
| shinco 2007-03-29 ch 9, | abuseOh, wow, that was awesome, Shazaam! I especially loved the 2nd line! That was so cool! Gonna read the next chapter now, lol GO SHAZAAM! |
| simpleplan13 2006-12-03 ch 10, | abuseI love "shouting quietly"... short and beautiful |
| Safira 2006-10-26 ch 7, | abuseFirst off, “appear blank globe” is an eye catching title – nice! This is a haiku that reminds one of the insignificance of the Self in contrast to this majestic world and beyond. It leaves me feeling infinitesimal and awe of this universe – a feeling, which if you allow, overwhelms you completely. “Buried swimming pool” is an interesting analogy for our mother earth. Cheers, Autumn. |
| breezy nostrils 2006-10-25 ch 10, | abuselove the middle line. nice work. |
| Guardrail 2006-10-24 ch 10, | abuseThis is such a great collection, I love the imagry and mood throught these haikus. My favorites are Luminous Blood and Craved Termination. All of these are great. Definatley keep writing. |
| Safira 2006-10-22 ch 10, | abuseThis haiku holds two interesting takes on the night sky. For as long as I can remember, the night sky has always been perfect to me – each silver speck always there in place one night after the other. For you to describe it is as “galactic light year chaos” is definitely unexpected. It brings to mind the thought that Man’s fate is mapped out in the stars, and for it to be in chaos would reflect our very troubled world at the moment, would it not? I suppose like most things it boils down to perspective. Are you “The Optimist” that sees a simple starlit sky, or “The Pessimist” that sees an oppressed stretch of black in chaos? I would like to believe I am the former, but who knows? People change. Cheers, Autumn. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-10-20 ch 10, | abusewonderful energy! |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-10-20 ch 9, | abuseWonderful command of language - getting at the heart of the "matter" |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-10-20 ch 7, | abuseIntriguing. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-10-20 ch 8, | abuseExcellent diction - a rich equation of imagery. |
| FunkyFlower17 2006-08-07 ch 9, | abusewow. this is breathtaking. beautiful imagery. makes me think of a lot of rebellion...probably cuz of the last line. lol. awesome :) ~mez~ |
| FunkyFlower17 2006-08-07 ch 8, | abusei like this. it just screams inner power...secrecy...mystery etc. loved it :) ~mez~ |
| FunkyFlower17 2006-08-07 ch 7, | abusehmm, i like the inetesting perspective u brought with 'buried swimming pool'...sorta shows a different lime light. lol. *shrugs* great job, ~Mez~ |
| FunkyFlower17 2006-08-07 ch 6, | abusei like this...especially the title but its not as effective as the previous one :) lol...great job no doubt, ~Mez~ |