 loversdream17 2007-11-15 . chapter 1GREAT Job! It is another great piece. You have talent. I like how you got your meaning accrossed without spoiling the flow of it. Not many can i know i have problems with it. Great job. Keep up the good work.
Mandi~4~life |
 the-narration 2006-05-17 . chapter 1angsty, while still exhibiting raw power. i love the first three lines the best. =] |
 catseyeview 2004-11-20 . chapter 1I love the title to this poem and this reads as one can feel. I like the metaphor of the last three lines, "I cannot love you, no, for I sense the sun on my skin and it burns." Keep writing. crw |
 desolus 2004-11-05 . chapter 1*is silent*
You. Are. So. Good.
*is silently pondering again*
At the moment, "One Second Longer" has shost-curcuited by brain.
You craft this poem beautifully. Your words... Ah, magnificent. ^_^ Like water for my soul. I would boost your ego a lot more, but I've just run out of time (class ended).
Word To Sum It Up Before I Sign Off: Wonderful. |
 APersonAndAHalf 2004-10-10 . chapter 1...
"you and your words like forever and/your eyes like stars."
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-Wordlessness-
("Beautiful poem" is the best I can come up with right now) |