"It's what she never wanted,
living off of hotel rooms and written verse."
Best line.

oh this was so ** beautiful. i'm in awe of this, simply. the way you described them, so perfectly different, anonymously beautiful, just blew my mind. this whole thing is utterly amazing.
gorgeous.

I LOVE THE WAY YOU TELL THINGS!
SO DARNDIDDLYARN GOOD!
It may get a bit confusing if you write the entire thing like that
xoxox
ta'z hun

Wow! Excellent imagery, and diction. I especially loved, "her body a limp kingdom where she's given
him free princely reign, its curved contours lined with white juices
and dollar store epiphanies," Lovely. The syntax is wonderfully amazing. I also love "an empty opium white wall." So vivid. I hope you continue this one, and I can't wait to see where it goes. What an amazing prologue. I bow down to you.