This is very good. Excellent rhythm and the rhymes don't sound forced at all. It flows very easily and elegantly. Oh, and I use 'hasten' a lot. ;)

Nice, i like it ,and i like the imagery in which you use the word hasten, the image of life as a journey. I sometimes hasten towards another day the way you describe here, anxious to hear from someone i love and am afraod to lose. The short lines and stanzas give a nice formatting. Good job.

I like this, it flows well and somehow it just catches my fancy. Great job. God bless. Luvs,
~Bethy~

Excellent use of the word 'hasten'! I like the format, it's different. I also like how it's specific, but at the same time very vague. Good job!

great use of the short line format. great flow too. Good work!

An eye catcher, good work.