This is nice. I liked the use of internal rhymes. Just great rhyming overall. The imagery was fantastic too.

whoa. i've never read a poem about seduction. well, there's a first time for everything. great job. i really like the second stanza.

i can see how u incorporated some jazz into there...i really like the first stanza

Wow! I love that, and I know what it is to feel this way, you captured the emotions very well. I agree with you on this topic, it is a defeat to women, yet most of the time sweet to men. Beautiful and powerful work. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.