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| do not resuscitate 2004-09-27 ch 1, | so desolately wonderful. your words here resonate, echo as if over a frozen tundra, running and whispering for miles. |
| JazzPizza 2004-09-16 ch 1, | Excellent and specific imagery, bringing forth a frigid air. And again, nice line structure. To try to be constructive, though, I think punctuation was a little bit underused. Not devastatingly so, but I think you could have worked more with it. |
| Paste on Smile 2004-09-13 ch 1, | eep...stunning... |
| if sighing 2004-09-11 ch 1, | Just beautifully written, I just loved some of the phrasing in this poem. ~dusk |