I REALLY LIKE THIS ONE A LOT for some reason...awesome. about the failing of dreams, etc...very deep. i will remember this one

My, that was great! *tear* I loved the way you incorporated archaism in it and all. And besides, chivalry never ceases to intrigue me! Hey, if you've the time, check out my poem too. Well what do you know... it's about a knight too!
luv ya!
-kaz

Fully described and developed verse. Clearly stated, stands on its own and leaves you hungering for more, like the perfect meal—satiety without bloat! Well done. -m-
p.s. pls take a look at my 3 Humble Haiku Echoes of Basho—
Weeded fields of grass,
Armored knights clashing bloodied.
Lasting,— legacy.
(Lasting, legacy.)
(Lasting-legacy.)
(Lasting, . . . legacy)
(¡Lasting!¿Legacy?)
(¿Lasting legacy?)
A.N. Basho wrote his haunting haiku about struggle
and glory after having climbed up to the ruins of a once
formidable castle that dominated an entire region. He saw
the summer grasses overrunning the fortifications and
wept. Other echos—¿Transitory or permanent man’s
works or glories? ¿Summer grasses—summer glory or
recurring victory?¿ Man’s glory as beautiful as summer
grasses?¿ Man’s glories reached through struggles bloody,
but lacking the permanence of fragile summer grass? etc.