Holy moly. This gave me the shivers. LR

Ooh, I like this one a lot, too. My only question is, did you spell "Beatles" that way on purpose? Because that's a 60's band. ;)
I suppose I would like this one, then, wouldn't I, though?
"His goal the final last breath" is my favorite part, I think.

really awesome. great imagery and ending.

Good, but I think you need to polish it up a bit more. *snooty smile* -m-