|Reviews for The wounded girl inside of me|
| Mirabella 4/19/12 . chapter 6
Really well done. I like your rhyming pattern and repition.
| fleur de l'est 4/19/12 . chapter 6
Amazing! Especially seeing how you can create a vivid imagery without breaking the versificational rules of a villanelle - I've only attempted once and know how hard *I* found it.
Great choice of vocabulary. e.g. cobweb, dispel.. The poem has a very gothic feel to it XD
| Jareth the Monk 4/19/12 . chapter 6
Like this one and I should get back to reviewing more often. Reminds me of Edgar Allan Poe for some reason. Probably in reference to the crows and ravens and such, how about another stanza like:
Phantom wings, begone ye from my sight,
For my vision is for morning's promise full-
Please dispel the shadows of the night!
| Eypherath 4/19/12 . chapter 6
Kind of reminds me of Edgar Allen Poe...It is hard to read, but that kind of gives the whole thing the feeling of psychosis...Reading it feels like a schizophrenic, haunted by his own shadows...
| Keskonrix 4/19/12 . chapter 6
An awesome piece, once more. I like how the last stanza expresses hope that the fears expressed in the previous stanzas (e.g."wrong ... cannot be made right", is "out of control") could, after all, be unfounded - and just a result of the speaker's own perception being darkened by her bad experiences. And, naturally, the expressed hope that there is somebody out there who can (and will) heal the wounds, make right the wrong, "dispel the shadows of the night", and remove the "cruel phantome". Not an ill-founded hope at all, I might add.
| Erlkoenigin 4/19/12 . chapter 6
Ich finde das Vilanelle mit seinen Wiederholungen und der Beschränkung auf zwei Reimsilben sehr eindrucksvoll (nice ist schon leicht diskrimierend bei dem ernsten Thema).
Die letzte Strophe hat mich schwer an Tolkien erinnert, mit dem sword that had been broken.
| LostInMe 4/19/12 . chapter 6
It's very nice. I like it.
| alwaysbeyourself 4/19/12 . chapter 6
Was ein wahnsinns Gedicht. Sehr gut geworden, ich mag die Wiederholungen.
| marshbar916 4/19/12 . chapter 5
very interesting poem and very powerful. thanks for sharing and keep writing!
| Handmaiden4Him 4/19/12 . chapter 5
This is an amazing poem and it really speaks to the heart of the matter. I know a lot of people can relate to this in many different ways so I'm very glad you have written it. Thanks. Keep up the great work! God bless!
| Getuie 4/19/12 . chapter 5
The poem kind of made me think of the song "Damaged" by Plumb.
"None of us can be strong
always, alone on our own,"
This line stuck with me... I think it kind of speaks out the truth within the darkness of blaming self... A very striking poem.
| myno 4/19/12 . chapter 5
beautifully written, thanks for the kind reviews, I will try, really try, to find a way to trust him again. It's so hard... If we weren't so close, if he weren't my brother and we didn't both have to face each other every day, it would be easier, i think, to heal... But that's not how it is, so I just have to keep trying.
| simpleplan13 4/19/12 . chapter 5
I like it.. very nicely written
| Anastasia Who 4/19/12 . chapter 5
This was really good. It has lots of symbolism in it and good imagery. It is an angsty poem, but also a happy one. Well done
| brknheartlonely 4/19/12 . chapter 5
That was a really great poem, it really made me think about all the stuff I have been through, I have recently given my life to christ and I was too a victim of Satan's lies and deciet and sometimes I still am but not as often.
Your poem really lifted my spirits. Thank you for writing it.