Great discriptons, your writing style is very entertaining.

Good Job, shawn! I love it! Keep it up!

~~Amanda from school. :P

***-anarchick**

Great futuristic detail. The descriptions are wonderful, you are a very talented writer.

You are an amazing writer. I love the plot, keep up the good work.

Hey! I like the plot of the first chapter. If I had to give any suggestions, I'd develop Juliana and Robert's characters more. Even though they'll be dying shortly, they're the first characters we meet, so we want to like them and feel for their death. Best I got :). Also I think you jump to the end too quick. It's an awesome time for a thrilling moment or pageturning suspense if you develop it alittle more. I'll be waiting for chapter two! See ya. Ryan.