omg! that is so cute. guys are slow! *sigh*

wow..this is really good!

Good one! Love the whoa! part! haha!

nice...loved the ending:D...and i love the subtle physical contact idea btw...gotta try it out:D

sugoi!! i was shocked you mentioned takeshi in this one. i can imagine you being grace and myself as elaine.. hehehe

so adorably cute!

Oh. My. Gosh. I loved that story! It was amzing. In my opinion, I would love to see you go further with it, I'm really interested to know what would come next.

That was hilariously enjoyable! To think.. it was him they were talking about. That was excellent!

this is good

that was great!no coments!!

Not bad. The laguage at the end wasn't really needed, but oh well. Is this just a short story or is it the end?

o i like this...i like where it's going...hehe update soon!

I thought that was a good ending. I hate it when writers assume you can't figure anything out and then beat you over the head with some big, elaborate explanation. My advice is leave it where it is.

I thought that was a good ending. I hate it when writers assume you can't figure anything out and then beat you over the head with some big, elaborate explanation. My advice is leave it where it is.

Ohh, I like. You don't often get stories in the guy POV and you made em proud :P