This is an absolutely amazing poem. I loved it. Your desriptions left me in awe. I've been sitting here for at least ten minutes thinking of something to say about this, but I'm speechless. It's flawless.

This was really well-written...the imagery was...amazing...I like it, keep it up.--pammy-

Hello- I enjoyed the poem. I thought you did a good job with painting the poem with details.

To start, this is great. It has a deep meaning and a shallowish one. It has levels, one of the best things for a poem to have. Now, down to buisness. Ok... most of these are minor. First, you said im instead of I'm, i instead of I. (Grammar freak=I.)Then, there is one thing I would like to say that isn't a grammar freak thing.When you ended, you said "sleep..." and that is great. It receads away, leaving you with a finish, but an unanswered question. But (always a but), if you end with a period, it still works. It just looks better. Always lean back and look at the lines. It is a minor thing that can really make changes. Another minor thing, there are a few tiny kinks in the rythm. Other than that, I really really like it, because it has a flow and it ryhmes without becoming stupid. Sorry about my phrank comments. If it didn't seem like it, I really do like this poem. Good job; keep it up. :)

That was dramatic. It was all a dream, that is meaningful.

To me, everything seems alright except for this one line that seems to have one too many syllables, "They've been held inside too long"...um maybe it's just me...

Well, it seems like your life's been in the upside. Good for you. Keep on writing!

Seh-Rin

Awsome poem i love the depth. keep it up